Describing data from bar chart

WRITING ASSIGNMENT

I had writing class in English Department, Hasanuddin University. I have a great great great writing's lecturer. I was antusiasm when I'm in class writing. This is one of my fav. subject.
Actualy, I have many assignment in this class and here, I want to share my assignment especially how to describe a bar chart. Actually, many people have their own problems, such as how to begin the writing, I mean to choose the first sentence, lack of vocabulary, and how to combine every sentences with the conjunction. So, here I'd like to share my assignment. Hope, people can make this as the comparison to make a description of paragraph. So, here is mine:

The bar chart shows the total number of male and female students who studied Computer Science at a UK University from 2010 to 2012 between British home and International students. Based on this chart, the total number of male British home students decreased from 39 in 2010 to 24 in 2011 and increased in 2012 with 43 students. This situation showed a fluctuation in the total number of students, but it’s different from female British home students. It showed a steady increase from 2010 to 2012, which reached 45 in 2012. This case made it as the greatest number of students who studied Computer Science. Similar to female British home students, the total number of male International students increased steadily every year. Actually, female international students increased every year, but it’s just a slight increase. It was proved by the total number of students just had 4 students increase from 2010 to 2011 and 2 students from 2011 to 2012. In addition, the highest number of female international students in 2012 was the same as the lowest number of male international students in 2010. Overall, the total number of British home students either male or female was higher than the total number of international students.

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